This does a good job creating the atmosphere of the planet. A bit of the unknown and unsettling, and I can see it working great as a sci-fi game level. Very ambient
But where it falls I'm afraid is that it may not tell the story of the picture so much. It doesn't do much about what the pilot may be thinking or feeling among the planet. It doesn't give the sense of despair that the pilot may be thinking, or the acceptance of inevitable death. It might hurt your score, it might not. I'll leave that up to RealFaction.
By itself it isn't a bad ambient piece. The mixing is decent and brings along a cool feeling with it.